Overview:
Madame Marie has many precious jewels that she is sending to her granddaughter in France. She must send them under another name and addressed to someone other than her granddaughter Louisa. Madame M sends a telegraph message in advance to Louisa so she knows what name it is under, which train it will be on and what time. Madame M must do this because many people have tried to steal her jewels in the past and these jewels must make it safely to Louisa before the thieves catch on to what she is doing.
Exposition:
Description of England where Madame M lives and Madame M. Introducing the idea of sending the number, date and time that the jewels will be sent by telegraph. Madame M still doubts the telegraph but finds it useful because she can keep her message anonymous. It will also get there faster but she puts the entire message in code just in case one of the thieves gets a hold of the message along the way.
Rising Action:
Madame M sends the message and the story changes so now it follows the journey of the message. Where it goes, how long it takes, who intercepts it excreta.
Climax:
A guy that goes by the name of Smith gets a hold of the telegraph message and reads it. He doesn’t know what it means but he starts to understand it. Eventually he figures out the whole message and leaves right away for the station. Fortunately Louisa solved it as well but who will get their first.
Falling Action:
Thankfully Madame Marie hid some inside clues in the message that Louisa found right away. Smith on the other hand did not so it took him longer to solve. Therefore he arrived after Louisa. He followed her and tried to take it from her but did not succeed.
Resolution:
Louisa receives the jewels safely. She then sends a message to her grandmother letting her know this. Madame M replies telling her about who Smith is, where to keep the jewels, and other important information.
Internal Conflict:
In the beginning Madame M realizes that she can't trust anyone because everyone seems to want the jewels including her brother even though they are not rightfully his. She soon begins trusting people again but soon finds out that someone she put her trust in betrayed her.
External Conflict:
Madame M sends the note and the jewels and the jewels soon become in danger. Now it is a race of who can solve the telegraph message and retrieve the jewels first, good or evil.
Connection:
The connect ion is both from danger to safety and confusion to order.
Exposition:
Description of England where Madame M lives and Madame M. Introducing the idea of sending the number, date and time that the jewels will be sent by telegraph. Madame M still doubts the telegraph but finds it useful because she can keep her message anonymous. It will also get there faster but she puts the entire message in code just in case one of the thieves gets a hold of the message along the way.
Rising Action:
Madame M sends the message and the story changes so now it follows the journey of the message. Where it goes, how long it takes, who intercepts it excreta.
Climax:
A guy that goes by the name of Smith gets a hold of the telegraph message and reads it. He doesn’t know what it means but he starts to understand it. Eventually he figures out the whole message and leaves right away for the station. Fortunately Louisa solved it as well but who will get their first.
Falling Action:
Thankfully Madame Marie hid some inside clues in the message that Louisa found right away. Smith on the other hand did not so it took him longer to solve. Therefore he arrived after Louisa. He followed her and tried to take it from her but did not succeed.
Resolution:
Louisa receives the jewels safely. She then sends a message to her grandmother letting her know this. Madame M replies telling her about who Smith is, where to keep the jewels, and other important information.
Internal Conflict:
In the beginning Madame M realizes that she can't trust anyone because everyone seems to want the jewels including her brother even though they are not rightfully his. She soon begins trusting people again but soon finds out that someone she put her trust in betrayed her.
External Conflict:
Madame M sends the note and the jewels and the jewels soon become in danger. Now it is a race of who can solve the telegraph message and retrieve the jewels first, good or evil.
Connection:
The connect ion is both from danger to safety and confusion to order.
3 comments:
Hey Naomi, My story relates to yours because mine has somthing to do with the telegraph. A secret message is being sent through it. Your story sounds really intresting-I cant wait to read it!
WOAW yours is really good! i love the whole intro to the outline, i wish i could of thought of that! i dont think you really said why she was sending the jewels off in the first place... maybe she just wanted to get rid of them... oh maybe they were stolen or enev better... cursed! any ways... i think you should clarify that in the story... other than that your outline was just suberd darling! cherio
hey naomi,
you have a really good story and that makes my job as a commenter harder. i think the climax could have a little more umph. i would say you should make it so that the thief gets there first. in the begging you should start out broader then go inward. well that is all i have to say and isn't my comment just the best.
peace love and gap.
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